magentagirl: (Max as Elton John)
In Another Castle

I haven't got the time to figure out what happened. It's too late for that now. I have to do what I can to make her comfortable. I'm not sure she even feels anything right now. She's alive but unresponsive.
I don't know what she did but now we're stuck. I'll have to call an ambulance even though she hates those things. Hates hospitals, too, but I have no choice. Well, I suppose that's not really true. There's always a choice. But I don't think she's ready to leave just yet, so I have to try to get her back. I know she's still in there but she's been getting further and further away.
She's talked to me about how she feels when she gets like this. She's said she feels the urge to be in another castle. Somewhere safer than where we are now. It's not like things are that bad here but apparently to her they are. I don't understand her very well, but I guess it kind of makes sense.
I know she has trouble with things. It's hard to be poor when you've come from money. She definitely sacrificed some basic comforts when we got married. And now that we've got kids it's been even more of a challenge. I know she's not really happy trying to keep them entertained. And I'm not much help when I get home from work.
I could tell she was starting to go when I'd get home and things would be a mess. The baby would be crying and hungry. And sometimes I'd get calls from the school saying no one had come to get Charlie yet, and was everything all right? I'd try to smooth things over with them but I could tell they didn't really believe me. Nothing I would say would get through to her. It didn't do any good to get angry, and I could see she wasn't okay but I'm doing all that I can to keep us afloat and keep the kids sort of okay, and how could I keep her okay too? I didn't think I'd have to worry about that.
I'm going to have to call my sister to see if she can come stay with the kids for a little bit. They love their aunt.
It must be hard on them. At least I'm the one who found her. At least she did it during the night and not while she was at home alone with the baby. At least it was on a Saturday so I don't have to worry about taking off work, not today, anyway.
Our next door neighbor is watching the kids while I ride with her to the hospital, and my sister should get there soon. I hope I'm doing the right thing by trying to save her. I think I am, but I won't know unless she comes back. I guess I have to trust that this is what she wants. She makes it so hard to figure out.

Date: 2014-03-31 01:23 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Wow. That's really rough. Interesting take on the prompt.

Date: 2014-03-31 04:33 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
It is fiction, but I figure when I'm in a mood like this it's better to take things out on characters.

Date: 2014-04-02 11:54 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Oh man, I so understand that.

Date: 2014-03-31 02:29 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
What a sad and difficult situation! This was a creative take on the prompt.

Date: 2014-03-31 04:32 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]

Date: 2014-03-31 03:35 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
OK, now I want more.

Date: 2014-03-31 04:31 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
I may work on it moreā€¦I have so many projects at this point I think I need to finish something first!

Date: 2014-03-31 04:08 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Wow. So sad. Is this based on real events?

Date: 2014-03-31 04:31 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
No, just disturbed state of mind.

Date: 2014-03-31 11:17 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
This was incredibly sad. There are so many people who live like the people in your story. A very sad reality for all involved.

Date: 2014-03-31 11:22 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
I suffer from depression myself but I am lucky enough to never have gotten this low.

Date: 2014-04-01 12:14 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
You really capture the husband's puzzled, searching voice.

Date: 2014-04-01 12:19 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you!

Date: 2014-04-01 04:14 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
That was fantastic train of thought... the jumping all over, stress reaction.

Date: 2014-04-01 04:15 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you!

Date: 2014-04-01 12:53 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
This is chilling, and yet... so very plausible. Well done on a unique take on the prompt!

Date: 2014-04-01 12:57 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you!

Date: 2014-04-02 05:04 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
This has a rambling, jumbled feel to it that makes it more real.

Interesting use of the prompt.

Date: 2014-04-02 10:36 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you.

Date: 2014-04-02 11:55 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
You did a really good job of developing the narrator's perspective and situation. Poor guy (girl?).

Date: 2014-04-02 12:23 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you!

Date: 2014-04-02 03:54 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
I always wonder what goes through my wife's head when I have a breakdown. This probably brings me one step closer.

Date: 2014-04-02 11:28 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Tip for posting things on the internet- you really need to leave spaces between paragraphs. Your entry is so hard to read, that it deters me from voting for it, regardless of the content. I doubt I'm the only one who feels like that, even though I'll be the only one telling you. Hope you fix that next week.

Date: 2014-04-03 02:08 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thanks for letting me know.

Date: 2014-04-03 12:40 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Like it.

Lots of potential for expansion, don't you think?

Date: 2014-04-03 02:08 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you. I may expand at some point.

Date: 2014-04-03 05:19 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
this is so sad..and could be someone's reality...could captured it well..

Date: 2014-04-03 11:21 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you.

Date: 2014-04-03 06:06 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
I liked the structure of how you relayed this, with the present and then a dip to the past and then back to the present again.

The wife here... is clearly unhappy at home. Whether she has depression or just isn't suited to that particular life, something needs to change for her.

Date: 2014-04-03 11:21 am (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you. And yes, you are right about the wife.

Date: 2014-04-03 01:45 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
This is really sad, but I enjoyed reading it.

Date: 2014-04-03 02:13 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Thank you!

Date: 2014-04-03 07:11 pm (UTC)From: [identity profile]
Poor narrator. *hugs*
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